Comments for Come Write Out And Say IT http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com Say What You Mean, And Mean What You Say Tue, 24 Feb 2009 17:32:31 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on Do We Want Horsepower? or Horse Power? by lhuff http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/2009/02/24/do-we-want-horsepower-or-horse-power/#comment-28 lhuff Tue, 24 Feb 2009 17:32:31 +0000 http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/?p=47#comment-28 What a witty intro--I love it! Your wordplay on "mustangs" throughout the piece is quite effective. You also construct a sound argument. Nice job! What a witty intro–I love it! Your wordplay on “mustangs” throughout the piece is quite effective.

You also construct a sound argument. Nice job!

]]> Comment on Breaking Up Is Hard To Do… by lhuff http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/2009/02/20/breaking-up-is-hard-to-do/#comment-27 lhuff Fri, 20 Feb 2009 02:50:11 +0000 http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/?p=42#comment-27 Bravo. Really. This is a superb piece of writing. 1. You've constructed a solid argument. 2. You've seemlessly woven in source info. 3. You've written with stylistic flair. Your "love affair" opening is brilliant. Mentioning "relationship" in conclusion makes for a nice ending. Good work! Bravo. Really. This is a superb piece of writing.

1. You’ve constructed a solid argument.
2. You’ve seemlessly woven in source info.
3. You’ve written with stylistic flair. Your “love affair” opening is brilliant. Mentioning “relationship” in conclusion makes for a nice ending.

Good work!

]]> Comment on Drill Today, Plan for Tomorrow by lhuff http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/2009/02/16/drill-today-plan-for-tomorrow/#comment-26 lhuff Wed, 18 Feb 2009 20:25:21 +0000 http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/?p=40#comment-26 Good argument. You're doing an excellent job integrating info from other sources.:) Good argument. You’re doing an excellent job integrating info from other sources.:)

]]> Comment on And the Topic of the Day IS… by justread http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/2009/02/04/and-the-topic-of-the-day-is/#comment-25 justread Sun, 08 Feb 2009 01:27:20 +0000 http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/?p=33#comment-25 You've constructed a pretty solid argument here. As for labeling the pieces according to Toulmin's theory, you derailed just a bit. Warrant: This is the explanation of how the data justifies the claim. Your claim is that we need to drill to become more self-sufficient. The data based this claim upon is the rising prices of many goods impacted by rising oil prices. So, in the warrant, you must explain how rising prices justifies off-shore drilling. Qualifier: When you qualify, you limit your argument. For example, you might argue we need to drill off-shore <b>until</b> alternate energy sources can be developed and implemented. You’ve constructed a pretty solid argument here. As for labeling the pieces according to Toulmin’s theory, you derailed just a bit.

Warrant: This is the explanation of how the data justifies the claim. Your claim is that we need to drill to become more self-sufficient. The data based this claim upon is the rising prices of many goods impacted by rising oil prices. So, in the warrant, you must explain how rising prices justifies off-shore drilling.

Qualifier: When you qualify, you limit your argument. For example, you might argue we need to drill off-shore until alternate energy sources can be developed and implemented.

]]> Comment on And the Topic of the Day IS… by starsandthoughts http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/2009/02/04/and-the-topic-of-the-day-is/#comment-23 starsandthoughts Wed, 04 Feb 2009 00:37:50 +0000 http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/?p=33#comment-23 sorry about the random stuff at the top...i dont know why it is there :S sorry about the random stuff at the top…i dont know why it is there :S

]]> Comment on Shopping for Style by lhuff http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/2008/11/30/shopping-for-style/#comment-22 lhuff Tue, 02 Dec 2008 15:08:09 +0000 http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/?p=31#comment-22 Being an avid shopper myself, I'm diggin' your intro and conclusion! Very catchy and timely. FYI: your last example contains an absolute phrase, a structure we'll be studying between now and Christmas. Do you see it? Being an avid shopper myself, I’m diggin’ your intro and conclusion! Very catchy and timely. FYI: your last example contains an absolute phrase, a structure we’ll be studying between now and Christmas. Do you see it?

]]> Comment on L.A. Times Music News RSS Feed by lhuff http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/2008/07/24/la-times-music-news-rss-feed/#comment-21 lhuff Sun, 17 Aug 2008 21:52:05 +0000 http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/?p=17#comment-21 "I really think that just reading anything helps me to think better and deeper into certain subjects" You are correct! That's why reading is the signal activity that can have the greatest impact on our intellects! When we read actively (like you're doing)--and then discuss our ideas and write about them--we REALLY grow dendrites!! Keep reading. “I really think that just reading anything helps me to think better and deeper into certain subjects”

You are correct! That’s why reading is the signal activity that can have the greatest impact on our intellects! When we read actively (like you’re doing)–and then discuss our ideas and write about them–we REALLY grow dendrites!! Keep reading.

]]> Comment on My Mini-Saga by Rajesh Setty http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/2008/08/08/my-mini-saga/#comment-20 Rajesh Setty Sun, 17 Aug 2008 01:01:17 +0000 http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/?p=20#comment-20 Very nicely done. I enjoyed the picture along with the mini saga. One quick suggestion would be to enlarge the photo and embed the mini saga within the photo and make it a photographic mini saga. Best, Raj Very nicely done. I enjoyed the picture along with the mini saga. One quick suggestion would be to enlarge the photo and embed the mini saga within the photo and make it a photographic mini saga.

Best,
Raj

]]> Comment on My Mini-Saga by lhuff http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/2008/08/08/my-mini-saga/#comment-19 lhuff Sat, 16 Aug 2008 04:42:05 +0000 http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/?p=20#comment-19 I love it! Great work, Kirbi! I love it! Great work, Kirbi!

]]> Comment on My Mini-Saga by Meredith http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/2008/08/08/my-mini-saga/#comment-18 Meredith Thu, 14 Aug 2008 23:36:50 +0000 http://starsandthoughts.wordpress.com/?p=20#comment-18 haha...love the story kirbi...it's very much like something you would write :P lol haha…love the story kirbi…it’s very much like something you would write :P lol

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